and a thoughtful dedication. It would be good if you could round it of with a couple of full peotic senences to finish. This would tie all the provocative lines together and leave the reader with an impact.
Good job though. It goes to show that, although you don't remember those tragic events, it has left a mark on you and your generation, and Undoubtedly generations to come.
Perhaps your last lines could reflect this.
For this book I would actually go to YouTube and find video's that people took and add it making your story an audio book. It would make it much more of an impact for people to see these images as a dedication to the brave souls on that fateful day of 9/11/01. That's just something I would consider but u write it the way u want to ok. Great start though
angelapriest
why would somone make a book about sounds lame..................................................
please update so i can like it not love but like it it will take a lot more hard work and effert for me to add this to my favriots