This was very thought provoking. It does take both, dicipline and training and you are right, they don't owe us anything. It was our job as parents, but oh how hard that job can be sometimes. I liked how you used the vine to get your point across. I have a couple line edits for you. Please ignore if you disagree with them.
..., just the word it self ... (itself is one word)
...and drive up you're your drive way.
(...and drive up... Show more
This was very thought provoking. It does take both, dicipline and training and you are right, they don't owe us anything. It was our job as parents, but oh how hard that job can be sometimes. I liked how you used the vine to get your point across. I have a couple line edits for you. Please ignore if you disagree with them.
..., just the word it self ... (itself is one word)
...and drive up you're your drive way.
(...and drive up your driveway.) Had an extra you're in there. Driveway is one word.
I love you dad and always will. (When dad is being used in place of a name it should probably be capped. Then I would also place commas around Dad to set it apart. I love you, Dad, and I always will.)
Thank you for putting your story up. I enjoyed it very much and I'm looking forward to reading more of your work.
Denna
I struggle with grammar and spelling. I'm dyslexic. That is probably what has kept me from putting any of my pieces out before. But, I need to brave it. I can't learn if I don't. Thank for your help. Berta
Raising our children is hard work. My 3 are grown now. Looking back, I can see now that if I had not gooten so caught up with life, and just spent a bit more time, it would of been better. I'm thanful you enjoyed. Berta
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