ALL THE THINGS SHE SAID

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User: Seuchi
ALL THE THINGS SHE SAID
This is not enough.All the things she said running through my head.I'm in serious shit.And i'm all mixed and feeling so rushed,and they say It's my fault but I want her so much.Being with you has opended my eyes.Could I ever believe in such a perfect surpise.When they stop and stare don't worry me.Cause I'm feeling for her what she's feeling for me.Wanna fly her away.Where the run and the rain.Come in over my face.Wash away all the shame

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tati999

cool book i think. lol jk
it is cool

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rajjio

...this is what one can truly call a "literary vignette"- short and complete. I love vignettes like I love a charming glass of french wine. But, from your standpoint, one could say that the piece is like spicy hot sauce sprinkled over salty potato chips-crunchy and delicious to the last chew!

some of your phrasing is just so poignantly graphic and gives a fine blend to the story. I wont critique or detail here, but suffice to... Show more

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Seuchi

Lol! thanks looking forward to doing that.(p.s it's a bisexutal book)

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Deleted User

Very good start! Please msg me when you add more to your story, I want to see what happens next. good book

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