I am new also and tend to check spelling and so on later, trying first to get a flow going. Like at the beginning when Lindsay describes the killing; move the words on to separate lines to give even sharp nastier intakes from the reader. Plan to give the reader a different feeling when getting information from the good and the bad cast.
So hey! This is the first time I've reviewed anything here (I'm new too), so bear with me and I hope this is more helpful than subjective.
(Bad cop:)I really wasn't expecting much after reading your posts and bio thinking the spelling errors were an indicator of poor craft. (Good cop:)But I was surprised to see that your work had some good feel to it, and definitely has some bite and interest to keep reading. Assuming the... Show more
Thanks for the advice.
I always hate trying to critique stuff because it sounds like I believe myself to be an authority. And with my extensive background in publishing doodley-squat, an authority I am not. So, whoever gives you advice, take from it what works for you. (And I'm giving more advice... Show more