BookRix

The poem is nicely put. Even with the title, I was not quite sure what to expect. Well done :)

However, some of your capitalization was off. I understand that it can be used as a stylistic, personal thing that distinguishes you from other authors/poets, but the way you did it was a tad awkward. Also, make sure you don't switch tenses. It stops the flow of though and makes the reader stumble.

Otherwise, this was well done :) Awesome job!

Great job!
Keep writing!

---RbG

That was a completely evolved poem. Unique subject matter and the feeling of a dream.
nicely well rounded.