wow..extremely good beginning..edge of my seat suspense and action...definitely needs to be continued..."something out of x-files"
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Obviously, the beginning of a much longer story. Could use a bit of touch-up editing, but the plot is an attention grabber and makes you want to find out more...
ss-The Camera
Great tale -good character and intensity.
You do need to check spelling and punctuation. If you're like me, you never ha da good grammar class and it takes a lot to get it clean and ready for a fast and interesting read.
Worth the effort in the long run.
Would ease the reading with attention to paragraphs, and marked separations for changing pov. Would like to read more let me know when more is available.