BookRix

This story was heart wrenching and lovely. There are a few typos though that you might want to remove but apart from that great job on this plot. I hope that there's more soon.
-Angely

hey, great story idea, but you may want to spend a little more time with it, don't cram it all down our throats in a few paragraphs. maybe instead of having her aware that she's in two dimensions at once, have her 'teleported there'. when she comes back to this dimension, it's as if no time has passed at all for the people around her. same in the other dimension. feel free to message me and get a dialogue started, i'd love to give you some advice on how you could turn this into an amazing story