I was put off by the "death is beautiful" line in the first poem or two, but you turned on the concept of "beauty" itself from quite a few angles--and that was a nice surprise.
Clearly you feel deeply and try to cage those feelings when you write. You are at your best when your poems words "love is poison" is the start of a string a poems and not the ending--like you did with the concept of beauty.
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I was put off by the "death is beautiful" line in the first poem or two, but you turned on the concept of "beauty" itself from quite a few angles--and that was a nice surprise.
Clearly you feel deeply and try to cage those feelings when you write. You are at your best when your poems words "love is poison" is the start of a string a poems and not the ending--like you did with the concept of beauty.
You started saying "death is beautiful" and then you went into how you longed FOR beauty--that's a great circumference. I'd like to see you start with "love is poison" and then write a few poems as to "what" about love is poison. What's the poison's name? What season is poison? Keep chasing those emotions and art will come. You're almost there.