Too funny! That ending was hysterical! Loved it.
The points you raised are valid and I will make due corrections.
Thankyou for taking time to detail them.
I am new to writing this being my first story and I hope to write more.
As for the Us Flag question
It goes with the Us flag background and avatar :p
I do have family in America who live in Chicago
My favourite kind of story writing with a great double twist. Well done.
Carol x