I was prompted to read this via the K2C forum and boy am I glad I did. All I can say is Captivating yes I used a capital C because this is outstanding writing.
Although the character names and places depict a fantasy world, it could also be medieval England. The reader is drawn in with ease by this clever writer. I love historical stories and quite like fantasy, here, we have both.
Scene setting, character and dialogue are... Show more
Equal in quality, perhaps.
I am impressed, direxwolf. You have a great introduction, immediate tension, and the narrative ability to keep the reader engrossed.
Yes, your dialogue I found sharp and identifying. Each statement, reply, question and answer builds the character(s). An intriguing beginning.
Um, wow? That was fabulous! There were only two or three typos/grammar errors, and I am completely enraptured. You've got the dialogue down pat! My only suggestion would be to make the font a little bigger. Right now, it's difficult to read. BUT totally worth it.
Do you mind if I promote it in my forum? This is seriously fabulous work. MUCH better than mine.