Hello and welcome! I like your style of writing. Clear, well structured, very little in misspellings or grammar mistakes. All I can really suggest is a little more action at the beginning or 'hooks' to give your reader the desire to read on to see how the problems are resolved. Also, to make contacts here to get readers to your books, read other's work and comment and then they will usually read something of yours. Enter a... Show more
Hello and welcome! I like your style of writing. Clear, well structured, very little in misspellings or grammar mistakes. All I can really suggest is a little more action at the beginning or 'hooks' to give your reader the desire to read on to see how the problems are resolved. Also, to make contacts here to get readers to your books, read other's work and comment and then they will usually read something of yours. Enter a contest, that always helps you to make contacts. You did a good job by asking in the Learning to Write Better thread. That is what brought me to your site. Hope to read more, I have enjoyed your work. You have promising talent. Robynn